Script Audition

Did it just in time!

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Hi there, welcome to the forums! I'm Toast and I'll be critiquing your audition!
Okay, so overall it was very well done for a first try, there's just a few little nit-picky things that I want to point out.
First of all, and this is the only big thing, you forgot the key at the start! you know, the thing that tells you which bit's which, it's hard to explain but I think you know what I mean.
Secondly, when someone is saying someone else's name, the name being said doesn't have to be in bold, because it's just like a regular sentance. For example,

Red: (surprised) Green!

Green doesn't have to be in bold for that, but it's an easy mistake to make.
Okay, next, you missed just a few sound effects, like when Red captured Pika, you didn't say anything about the pokeball closing or making a ding (or something) to say Pika was caught. Also, when the guy with the net got shocked, there was no noise to say he hit the ground. Again, when Pika was eating the apple, no crunching sounds, but you did put in a lot of sound effects, which is often the one big critique for script auditions, "needs more sound effects" but yours were pretty good!
Your spelling was good, the only thing is grammer. You often didn't put a capital at the start of sentances, mostly in speech, probably because word corrects it that way (annoyingly) I have troubles with that all the time when writing miniscripts, it's not massivley important, but it still counts.
Okay, I think I'm done with my critique! Like I say, a lot of this is just little nit-picky things, and mostly for your benefit. Someone with more power and... leadership (?) *cough*Nova*cough* will have to say if you're accepted or not, but fingers crossed!
oh and, make sure you read the rules

Okay, what do I have to say ... ?

First thing: lack of key and titles and such, kind of confusing. Not a big thing cuz it's eay to fix, but still.

You also got the first two lines in the wrong order, interestingly. It's "get it!" then "Hurry!"

then there is the shocking of the net guy ... it wasn;t bad, but "Craaap" is just kinda lame. Actually, what's our policy on swearing? I want that net guy to either go "Shiit" or "Aagh" dependently.

There were points as well where the direction wasn't very good ...

Crowd Person 3: (Shouting) Hey! It’s getting away again.

Is he shouting angrily? Or with surprise? It's not specific enough (it's kind of with realisation, cuz of the 'ting' mark)
or:

Crowd person 2: (admiring) A pokemon!

Should be hopeful, actually >_>

And just after that, I don't think Pika actually shocks Red, just Bulba. But, consider the flashing and all that, that's why he cries out. Minor point, but it's sort of important.

Also, with Red's "wanna know?". it's not wry. I didn;t think wry meant liek that, but I didn;t know so I looked it up.

wry/rī/Adjective
1. Using or expressing dry, esp. mocking, humor.
2. (of a person's face or features) Twisted into an expression of disgust, disappointment, or annoyance.

Green: (I know you can do better than that tone) you’re taking it easy on that Pikachu aren’t you Red?

As toast said, no bold for names in lines, and also, green's mockiung him, actually. it's mroe like a surely you can amnage ebtter than that kind of tone.

Sooo, it was generally good, so I'mma say yes, you can join. Welcome to the lowest rung of the aldder xD jk

Now I need to go through all the other auditions and give them a final say >_>

Thanks Nova and Toast

Welcome to the team Absol!
Someone will be in touch when we need you to do some actual work

We do work?

Well, we call it work, but you know...

*Ahem* Any admin ... ? Promote to team? Hmmm, or should I move the topic first . . . ?

oh didn't notice the official word. XD
ok then, moved, promoted~ <3