FF translation help?

Hello everyone, I'm an italian pokémon fan, Darken (I already presented (was presented the right word? No, I suppose)myself, but obviously a lot of you doesn't know me.)
I'm an FF author (not THAT kind of FF, adventure FF) and I wanted to publish my fanfiction in english, but, as you can (probably) see, my english level is not perfect. So, if someone could help me by reading the text and pointing errors (I know, it's a long work, sorry) it would be a huge help.
If someone is interested, please wrote it here.

And again, sorry for my english.

I could help, I guess! I'm not really a 'pro in English' or anything, but I can help at least And your English is pretty good ^^

Oh wow, if you can it would be a huge help ^^ thanks

I'd be willing to help, too, if you'd like.

I actually do a fair bit of proofreading for fan translations of video games. ^^;

Well, thank you, I would really appreciate that (hope "appreciate" is the right word)